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英语阅读|英语阅读理解|非常棒的写作指南!为何你写的人物不生动?找到缘由了……

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上了很多年的语文课,写了不少考试作文,但每次提起笔想要刻画人物的时候理想非常前凸后翘,现实非常骨感。如何才能写出栩栩如生、有血有肉的人物呢,相信今天这篇干货推荐会带给你一些启发。

练习自己:不要用想动词

美国名编剧、小说家恰克帕拉尼克(Chuck Palahniuk,《搏击会所》小说原作者)曾在2013年发表了一篇传授写作经验的文章。

在文中他提到了一个诀窍,即把文章中的各种想动词(Thought Verbs)去掉,代之以具体细节。

英语阅读|英语阅读理解|非常棒的写作指南!为何你写的人物不生动?找到缘由了……

去展示,而不是告知(show, don't tell)。

什么是想动词?以下列举一些:

感觉(Think)
了解(Know)
了解(Understand)
意识到(Realize)
相信(Believe)
想要(Want)
想起(Remember)
想象(Imagine)
想要(Desire)
思忖(Wonder)
爱(Love)
恨(Hate)


好的描写让读者感觉到人物之所想,而不是简单告知你人物的想法。


大家可以用一个场景作为例子:


Waiting for the bus, Mark started to worry about how long the trip would take.
马克一边等车,一边开始担忧起这趟旅游要多久。


上面这句话就是一个简单的陈述,至于马克为何要担忧,有多担忧,你可能非常难感同身受。


这就是大家需要将担忧这个想动词分解的地方:


The schedule said the bus would come by at noon, but Marks watch said it was already 11:57. You could see all the way down the road, as far as the Mall, and not see a bus. No doubt, the driver was parked at the turn-around, the far end of the line, taking a nap. The driver was kicked back, asleep, and Mark was going to be late. Or worse, the driver was drinking, and hed pull up drunk and charge Mark seventy-five cents for death in a fiery traffic accident
时间表上写公交车中午前就能到,但马克看手表时已经11:57了。一眼望到路的尽头,能看到购物中心,但一辆公交车也没。毫无疑问,司机停在了这条路那一头的中转站,正在打瞌睡,而马克就快要迟到了。可能更糟糕的是,司机在喝酒,然后他会醉醺醺地停下车,收马克75分钱,却将他的性命断送在惨烈的交通事故中。


经过如此的描写,读者能了解马克的更多细节:巴士还没有真的迟到,马克就已经开始担忧了;他对司机非常不信赖;他还有点生气,已经开始想象最糟糕的场景:这次旅途将会要了他的命。几句描写,就能大致勾勒出马克的性格特征。


帕拉尼克在文章中说道:


Instead of characters knowing anything, you must now present the details that allow the reader to know them.
不可以仅仅说人物了解,你要给出足够的细节,让读者也了解。


Instead of a character wanting something, you must now describe the thing so that the reader wants it.
假如人物想要什么东西,你就要描述这件东西,让读者也想要得到它。


写作者需要做的就是将表达想法的动词圈出来,将它重新藏在动作和言语等多姿多彩的细节之中,自然地表现出来。


想动词还有不少,除去上面列举的,连是(is)和有(have)等等都可纳入这个范畴,那样该怎么样通过细节来引起读者的兴趣和共情,想人物之想呢?


让大家一块儿看看帕拉尼克给出的例子吧。


Wonder 思忖


Kenny wondered if Monica didn't like him going out at night
肯尼在想,或许莫妮卡不喜欢他晚上出去玩


The mornings after Kenny had stayed out, beyond the last bus, until he'd had to bum a ride or pay for a cab and got home to find Monica faking sleep, faking because she never slept that quiet, those mornings, she'd only put her own cup of coffee in the microwave. Never his.
有时肯尼玩到凌晨,错过了最后一班公交车而不能不靠搭顺风车或打的回家,回到家就看到莫妮卡在装睡,由于她真睡着时不会这么安静。每次他晚归后的次日早晨,莫妮卡就只加热她我们的那杯咖啡,绝不帮他热咖啡。


Know 了解


Adam knew Gwen liked him.
亚当了解格温喜欢他。


Between classes, Gwen had always leaned on his locker when he'd go to open it. She'd roll her eyes and shove off with one foot, leaving a black-heel mark on the painted metal, but she also left the smell of her perfume. The combination lock would still be warm from her ass. And the next break, Gwen would be leaned there, again.
课间,亚当去开储物柜时,总发现格温倚在那儿。她会翻个白眼,蹬一脚喷漆金属柜门走开,留下一个黑色的鞋跟印,同时也留下了她的香水味道。组合锁上还留着她臀部的温度。下个课间,格温又会倚在那儿。


Is/Have 是/有


Ann's eyes are blue. / Ann has blue eyes.
安娜的双眼是蓝色的。/ 安娜有着蓝色的双眼。


Ann coughed and waved one hand past her face, clearing the cigarette smoke from her eyes, blue eyes, before she smiled
安娜咳了一下,抬起手在脸前扇了扇,将烟烟雾从双眼前赶走,那是一双蓝色的眸子,然后她微笑起来


帕拉尼克强调,想要人物生动立体,没什么捷径好走,唯有通过可感知的细节一点点塑造。以下几句是他的切身体会,值得一看:


Your story will always be stronger if you just show the physical actions and details of your characters and allow your reader to do the thinking and knowing. And loving and hating.
你的故事假如如此写会愈加有力:只展示人物的动作和细节,让读者去考虑和知道,去爱、去恨。

Instead of bland is and has statements, try burying your details of what a character has or is, in actions or gestures. At its most basic, this is showing your story instead of telling it.
比起用平淡的是或有,尽可能将人物是或有些特质藏在动作或姿态等细节之中。最基本的是,去展示你的故事,而不是告知其他人。

Better yet, get your character with another character, fast. Get them together and get the action started. Let their actions and words show their thoughts. You stay out of their heads.
想更好一点的话,叫你的人物遇见另一个人物,越快越好。让他们互动起来。让他们用行动和语言展示他们的想法。而你离得远远的他们的脑海。

法国著名作家福楼拜曾说:艺术家在他的作品中,应当像上帝在造物中一样,销声匿迹,而又万能,到处感感觉到,就是看不见他。


大文豪福楼拜塑造了《包法利夫人》中浪漫奔放的艾玛包法利,诗人歌德塑造了《少年维特之烦恼》中多情善感的维特,但他们都收起了我们的道德评判,隐藏起我们的喜恶与感情,叫人物与大环境冲撞沉浮、伴随自己性格与抉择走向他们自己选择的悲剧命。

艾玛包法利电影形象
在真的的作家笔下,人物有我们的生命,他们的故事由我们的性格与遭遇来决定,走向我们的结局,而不被作家左右。


回忆起看过的经典文学作品,就算情节伴随时间的流逝渐渐模糊,书中的经典人物却一直鲜活,陪着大家长大。


J.K.罗琳在《哈利波特与凤凰社》中塑造新角色疯女孩卢娜洛夫古德时,写到她十分夸张的大笑:


She let out a scream of mirth that caused Hedwig to wake up and flap her wings indignantly and Crookshanks to leap up into the luggage rack, hissing. She laughed so hard that her magazine slipped out of her grasp, slid down her legs, and onto the floor.
她爆发出一阵尖锐的笑声,海德薇被她吵醒了,愤怒地拍打着翅膀,克鲁克山则跳上了行李架,嘶嘶出气。卢娜笑得太疯,连手上的杂志都抓不住了,顺着腿滑落到地上。


That was funny!
太搞笑了!


Her prominent eyes swam with tears as she gasped for breath, staring at Ron.
卢娜盯着罗恩,笑岔了气,她鼓突的双眼里笑出了眼泪。

卡勒德胡赛尼在《追风筝的人》中描写青涩少年阿米尔对少女索拉雅的心动:

And when Sunday mornings came, I rose from bed, Soraya Taheri's brown-eyed face already in my head. In Baba's bus, I counted the miles until I'd see her sitting barefoot, arranging cardboard boxes of yellowed encyclopedias, her heels white against the asphalt, silver bracelets jingling around her slender wrists. I'd think of the shadow her hair cast on the ground when it slid off her back and hung down like a velvet curtain.
等到星期天早晨到来,我从床上起来,索拉雅塔赫里的脸颊和那双棕色的明眸已然在我脑中。坐在父亲的巴士里面,我暗暗数着路程,直到看见她赤足坐着,摆弄那些装着发黄的百科全书的纸箱,她的脚踝在柏油路的映衬下分外冰肌玉肤,柔美的手腕上有银环叮当作响。一头秀发从她背后滑落,像天鹅绒幕布那样垂下来,我想象着她的头发投射在地上的影子怔怔出神。

寥寥数段之间,一个个性格鲜明的人物跃然纸上,人物之间的情愫也刻画得十分到位。

人物是小说的灵魂,而通过细节为人物注入灵魂的办法,你掌握了吗?

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